Bassline opinion needed

[junglist]

I need your opinion on these two basslines. I'm not sure about the first one... but the second one's okay.

Here's a 128k mp3 sample of them in the tune (which is in the early stages atm)

SAMPLE

[eastern electrics]

both of them seem to be okay, BUT (dont get these next words too personal):

i just dont get it. why is everybody posting EACH and EVERY step of his production into this forum? i mean, what about creativity and self determination? asking in a way like "is that bassline okay" just seems (to me) like people cant decide alone what they want to do.
the production forum is for talkin ´bout techniques, hard-/software and so on...not for getting applause for the last 10 min of playing around in reason. i just feel like that´s killing creativity...dunno.

(>>> DUB-Section)

[sorry junglist for bashing your thread, but i wanted to say this for a long time...no personal thing!]


[if anyone does´nt understand this... -> f*** y** ...english is not my mother tongue, hehe ]

[junglist]

lol no offense taken at tall, I agree with what your saying. I posted this in the production forum because I could get some proper feedback from a larger majority of people who know what they're talking about in terms of music production rather than typical responses like 'cool' or 'rubbish;' or even ...okay

[greenseed]

hehe

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'cool'



no but i liked it... kindalike toads
needs way more siiiinnneee
maybe smore distortion/layers i dnno

[eastern electrics]

[...] or even ...okay

damn, u got me!
your right. i agree with greenseed, maybe you should some extra layers/ oscillators on these lines to make em sound thicker.

[djake]

i use msn to get quick feedback, but u gotta get people that will give u onist and good feedback

[clive]

Needs more reverb.