First Song ( please critique )fixed link with better ver.

[Mannyyyyy]

hey guys just finished my song i made in about 5 days using reason4. My opinion so much fun making music and I think i did alright but just wanted to share enjoy guys. Im 16 so hopefully in a couple of years ill have this down packed
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[Subgore]

Kick and snare sound weak, layer up the snare so its hitting you in the face hard. Needs a outro, kinda just stops. I love the drop really cool. I like the mid-high wobble but you need a sub bass in there. But all in all really good track for your first

thanks

[Mannyyyyy]

thanks dude ima work on it for my next song but i know what you mean

[NashX]

This is cool. Drums definitely need to be blown up a bit more, but the ideas are awesome . And sub-bass, as aforementioned, would be lush.

[Mannyyyyy]

thanks im working on this song right now giving it more sub bass and adding an outro but thanks for the info

[Mannyyyyy]

bump

[Subgore]

mate 100 percent better, sounds sick! I like the intro alot more now and the drums sound more fuller and in your face is cool. Keep up the good work man!

[Mannyyyyy]

thanks again dude

[Mannyyyyy]

bump