[feedback] first song hoping for some pointers.

[bloopyblop]

getting started in the music making experiment. hoping to get any and all perspectives would be greatly accepted.
new here so let me know whats up.

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[kriSSm]

i think you should eat more meat

[EFEKZ]

yea like a 33 oz. Steak might help to beef that up

[Cyma]

You have a good start as far as putting sounds down. Can't really extract any direct influences of yours so maybe that's a good thing. I would work on making a real story. Concentrate on a solid beginning middle ( maybe two middles) and end of the story. Some ebb and flow will really keep the listener interested. Once you have the main parts start working on transitions or tension and release aspects moving from one part to the next to keep it moving. Keep reading tutorials and make a ton of music. You'll get it sounding the same as it does in your head in no time.

~Cyma~

[bloopyblop]

ill make sure to start writing out the plot i guess. yeah this was all just to make something on the ol fl thanks for the pointers.

and as for meat eating you have to take it slow man. cant go from nothing but water and rice to a 32 it would blow a hole in my head.
but a cheezeburger sounds good for now. although this is more of a slim jim...

[CoreyGoesRawr]

This
http://dubstepforum.com/viewtopic.php?f=23&t=177089

also if you are new I suggest posting in the feedback thread in the production forum you get quicker responses and better advice typically just be sure and read the rules on the first page of the thread.

that being said not bad for a first tune you have good ideas floating around in there you just need more practice. my biggest complaint is there is a synth in there that seems like it is peaking at :58 its really distorted if you are using fl which I think you said you are just rout that to a channel and turn it down.

this or something similar

[makemerich]

acid? mushrooms? ecstacy?
corn on the wob? wob wob wob wob