Yo, welcome.
It's a great effort for your first go, better than mine anyway!
Right:
- Your snare is way too weak, layer it to make it really punch through.
- Add a tiny bit of compression on your drums, but don't over-compress.
- I'd probably looking into making your track shorter, unless you can make each areas more unique to the last. Perhaps a breakdown? a second drop?
- Ah yes, you need to make it drop, I was expecting something killer. Add sub, make the build-up greater. You know, make it make people do the 'bass face' kinda like they're taking a shit in their pants.
http://www.mixcloud.com/Regret/dubstep-forum-mix/ First ever mix. Made from free tracks in the feedback forum. Is your track in there?