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Re: WIPs/unfinished tunes for feedback * no finished tunes *

Post by ehbes » Sun Feb 26, 2012 7:09 am

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@mthrfnk
Love your drop man!!!!
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Can't find too much wrong except maybe the fx at 18 secs maybe move it to 20 sec point. Pretty fluid nonetheless
@Maza1
I think the you need to smoothen what you got going on at 1:36 so it sounds smoother. I like it though
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Re: WIPs/unfinished tunes for feedback * no finished tunes *

Post by SupaRaiden64 » Sun Feb 26, 2012 7:10 am

ehbrums1 wrote:
SupaRaiden64 wrote:<iframe width="100%" height="166" scrolling="no" frameborder="no" src="http://w.soundcloud.com/player/?url=htt ... "></iframe>
@mthrfnk
Love your drop man!!!!
@Rucker23
Can't find too much wrong except maybe the fx at 18 secs maybe move it to 20 sec point. Pretty fluid nonetheless
@Maza1
I think the you need to smoothen what you got going on at 1:36 so it sounds smoother. I like it though
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Re: WIPs/unfinished tunes for feedback * no finished tunes *

Post by coogcoo » Sun Feb 26, 2012 8:49 am

@suparaiden64 - read the mixdown thread, your midrange is wayyyyy too loud you can't hear anything going on

@maza1 - wheres the sub???? also the main synth sound gets kind of boring fast imo maybe a new patch is in order??

@mthrfnk - sounds too full, you need to take a hacksaw to that and seriously cut some freqs. i'd love to hear what it sounds like once you're done, though, cuz the arrangement is interesting

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something a little bit heavier than what i usually do... the main synths need some work and the drums need some more movement but i thought i'd post it up here to see what other criticism yall got. thanks! :4:

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Post by MaZa1 » Sun Feb 26, 2012 11:51 am

Yea i am doing some more variations to the synths / new patches.
And the sub is there :D But forgot to bring it back up since i took the volume down to mix other things :D

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Post by Brisance » Sun Feb 26, 2012 6:46 pm

coogcoo: I like the noise snares, with delayed reverbs in the intro. Bass is nice and distorted, but I think you'd need to lower the sub an octave or so.

SupaRaiden64: Not really fond of Your kick, the layered noise gets annoying after 2 hits. Up until you get to the drop, then ist sounds like you got every channel clipping and every possible frequency clashing, resulting in unpleasant muddy noise. Could be a lot better if you'd try mixing it, read the moneyshot thread.

MaZa1: Sounding solid, interesting, nothing to critique, really.


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Post by Samuel_L_Damnson » Sun Feb 26, 2012 7:58 pm

Brisance wrote: Now heres my new WIP. Pleased with the bass-sound, kind of antiserum-ish methinks.
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Post by RyLee » Sun Feb 26, 2012 8:46 pm

@Coogcoo - Sounds really cool, really intersting... I like how it sounds like its tearing right in your ears. Good job!

@Livingtradgedy - Your drums are lost man, maybe try sidechaing a bit unless you already are. The synths are nice and the bass sounds are pretty sweet, are you using the WOW plugin?

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Post by Samuel_L_Damnson » Sun Feb 26, 2012 10:37 pm

@coogcoo Thats a fucking odd bass line (in a good way) sounds like nothing else haha and the mix is tight (from what i can tell on these headphones).

@brisance As i said before its a cool bass sound, but the track feels a little empty so perhaps a pad or timestreched sample could sit in the back of the mix, thats more personal prefernce than anything else though. :)

@suparaiden Your drums are way lost in the mix, so perhaps turn down your midrange and eq notched out of it where the kick and snare are hitting, and the lfo seems too nuts for me, perhaps its a combination of it being too fast and resonant :)
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Post by mthrfnk » Mon Feb 27, 2012 1:06 am

Hey guys, thanks for the feedback on my previous track again.

Here's my feedback for everyone else:
@coogcoo:Intro is quite odd but good. I'm not sure if I like the bass though, it sounds a little too wet. You need to bring down your snare a tad too - it seems too loud in the mix. Good start for a track though.
@SupaRaiden64: Your melody at the beginning is kind of weird, and you need to bring your wobbly synth way down. Everything needs mixing and the synths need fattening - everything sounds a tad basic. The drop really just sounds like noise. I actually had to turn it off. Work on your sound design and mixing.
@Brisance: Nice minimal feel. The plucks set it off. Sounds good, nothing much to say really. Although if you developed the second half with a constant wobble bass that may be cool.

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Post by mthrfnk » Mon Feb 27, 2012 4:02 am

Ok I know I'm double posting but I just messed around with this remix, and I'd also lovesome feedback on this too.

I'll happily give extra feedback to people who listen to both of my track :)

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Post by TheGlacialNetwork » Mon Feb 27, 2012 5:48 am

@mthrfnk – On the first track, maybe put more variation in the bass riff at the drop. That drum fill right before the drop sounds weird, like it has some strange eq on it or something and the melody right before the drum fill has a weird volume envelope or something. The melody at 0:09 is really cool, and I like the vibe it creates together with that odd vocal sample. The drums are pretty cool, but I might do that reverse snare only every other hit, just personal preference. I like the overall sound of the drop but there's one sort of irritating sound/pattern, it's like a squeak that starts when the 4th kick drum of the drop comes in. I really like the second track, especially the intro. I might lose the chorus or whatever that effect on the vocal is, it's kind of distracting. The part at 1:30 seems a little long, maybe do some filter modulations or something to keep it interesting.

@Brisance – I like that melody you've got, it's simple, but cool. I don't really like the sound of the snare at 1:22. I might have a new part come in there too, not really sure what, maybe like a synth playing a quick accent or something. I'd add something halfway through the next section too. Maybe it's cause it's minimal, I haven't listened to that much so I don't really know how it's supposed to be, but being kind of empty would make sense given the name.

@Coogcoo - That ride at the beginning as a bit annoying, maybe pick a different sample and lower the volume. Not really a fan of the drop, it's a little chaotic for me, doesn't really give the tight, controlled feel that I think you need for really aggressive basslines, and the sounds aren't really doing it for me.

@SupaRaiden64 – Spend some time learning to make better melodies, whether by learning music theory or by improvising on a keyboard for a long, long time. No amount of mixing advice can do anything for a song with an annoying melody. Once you do that, work on your sound design and get better drum samples. Maybe use presets until you get the melody thing down.

@Maza1 – The bass comes in too early, in my opinion. The intro needs more development. The actual bass sound seems like it could work, but something's not working in the drop that I can't put my finger on. The bass is too quiet, and it needs more sub.

@Ruckr23 – I'm a sucker for DnB :) The pads at the beginning are pretty sweet, I'd make them louder throughout the song. The hihats don't sound organic enough. Maybe alternate a few different hihat samples, and add some shakers or something, and vary the volumes/timimg of the hits. It could really benefit from the live feel of sampled breaks. A different, louder kick sample might be good. The part that comes in at 0:33 is too loud, something with those kinds of frequencies cut through the mix really well, so they need to be quieter than you'd think. It needs some kind of background wash, like some noise or more longer decaying/looser hihats like I said before, and maybe more sub.

My WIP - This track is sort of nearing completion, I'm just working on the final mix, but if there are any parts that you think don't work, that I may have got tunnel vision on, I'd appreciate if you'd let me know. The sub level is driving me mad, I feel like I'm just completely guessing, so it's help a ton to know how that comes out on your system. It's at 110, but I don't really think it's moombahton. Not really sure what it is. No title yet. Also, my current alias is Thrive, not The Glacial Network, I just haven't made a new dsf account yet.
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Post by Kongret » Mon Feb 27, 2012 9:42 pm

Thanks for all the feedback guys! I guess i'll keep mixing it for another month or so :D

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Post by Dystinkt » Mon Feb 27, 2012 9:57 pm

theglacialnetwork- your lead sounds in the intro are a bit piercing, id eq out some of those harsh frequencies. mixdown seems alright, feels a tad dry in places, nice basslines they compliment the beat very well. id say this track needs an mc or a ocalist of some sort, just to fill up that space a bit. otherwise great track pal

mthrfnk- your snare feels a bit weak and filmy, id boost at 200 and 2k and try having a sample with a really fast attack to make it punch. the high pitched sound doesnt fit in with the track at all, and the track as a whole feels quite cold but that might just be my headphones. nice track pal keep it up

Brisance- Nice minimal vibes, id say put some reverb on the midrange though to make it sit a bit better in the mix. other than that mate its a great start keep going with it


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Post by Danimal » Mon Feb 27, 2012 11:43 pm

@TheGlacialNetwork

shit is crazy dude. Amazing bass work. Must have taking a ton of patience to get this one down. Well done! Maybe diversify the lead a bit more. I'd say more sustain and reverb on some parts.

@mthrfnk

not dubstep but I don't mind. Sounds pretty solid on that first one. Really nice vocals goin on there. Cheers mate!

@RyLee

nice dark dubstep tune. It has some sick reverb and EQin. Sounds almost like it was recorded in an amphitheater.

@Brisance

shits gangsta. I like the tempo on this thing. You could add some more texture with a bit of white noise rhythm or somethin. Just an idea for spreading out and makin it more dense. But it depends what you are goin for. Nice job. Like the snare when it goes "pweeeew".

@coogcoo

holy hell mate. Grimey as fuck. Dope sub. Really creative sounds. Gimme a bit more of interesting drums and I'll get wasted to this song! :h:

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Post by Nhaztaljik » Tue Feb 28, 2012 12:09 am

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Post by Darj » Tue Feb 28, 2012 12:26 am

@Nhaztaljik : Read rules, please.

@Danimal : Intro is basic, deserves more buildup like pads, noises etc... At the drop, the elvel between your synth and your bass doesn't fit. The overall is a bit messy and missing variation. Work your breaks a bit more, add some life ! Good point : Your drums are punchy. Keep it up

@Cheeky : Your hats are groovy, but too strong in your mix. Your kick/snare are too low, and your bass is a bit muddy. Improve mixdown and it could be a good track.

@TheGlacialNetwork : Really not my cup of tea but... You have very good production skills, really.

@mthrfnk : The part before the drop is really messy, I was lost. Your snare is too low, not punching enough. Nice idea anyway, deserves more work now !

@Brisance : Nice try, but still missing some small things. Add a pad, chords, and bit more hats. I love this kind of deep sounds, but don't be too minimalist.



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Post by Nhaztaljik » Tue Feb 28, 2012 2:31 am

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Post by Nhaztaljik » Tue Feb 28, 2012 2:49 am

Darj - Nice mix. The lead is groovy, and definitely like what you've done with the track, as far as placement. For what it's worth, if it were my track, I'd add a sound in there that jumps out of the mix to give it a little bite.

TheGlacialNetwork - I like the lead in the beginning and the way you start this out....vocals would set this off. The atmosphere is really nice. The build up is really cool, and you definitely turn this into something I didn't expect. It's got a happy dubstep sound though... a little soft for most tastes, but non the less the technique is great. The modulation is really cool.

Coogcoo - The lead just gives me a big headache, I mean if there was such thing as over modulating something, I think that would be it. Tone it down a bit. Work on intros, build up, and underlying melody. I feel like your sick, and you just took this track and did an expirament to see what you would get.

Good job guys.

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Post by Skang » Tue Feb 28, 2012 7:47 am

@coogcoo bassline is reealll yucky lol, maybe change up the percussion/drums a little bit to keep it interesting

@brisance love the minimal aspect of the tune, and digging the synth sound as well the bass

@suparaiden64 your mids are drowning out your drums, work on your mixdowns and EQing

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