Feedback appreciated, tune will only be up for few hours

[JoeBeOne]

Hey guys, I've sent this tune out to over a dozen labels, with little or no success. I'be been hording this tune, really not sure at this point.
but any honest feedback is truly appreciated.

Thanks in advance!

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[M3TROPOLI5]

hello~ leaving my two cents! now, this is strictly my opinion, but i felt the build up to the drop needed to be heavier. it seemed a little quiet for me. as for the rest of the tune, i think you need more dynamics. it felt a little repetitive. i felt your song could be compared to neros "doomsday", have the first half of the song in 8 beats and switch to 4 beats second half or mix and match haha. like you said, it felt like you were "hoarding" the tune itself as you said and didnt want to change it up. i think it'll be that much sweeter if you messed around with it in the beginning and left it as is in the second half. as for mastering i cant really say anything since i haven't really gotten that down yet haha. i wish you luck my friend!

[Envision]

It sounds pretty good. I also felt like it needed a heavier buildup in the beginning. I think messing around with it would be a good idea. Who knows, maybe you'll mess with it, send it out, and get a hit.