new track; feedback wanted (updated!)

[willb]

This one is in progress. I started out wanting to do something on the Martial Arts riddim, but it's wound up rather different. I'd appreciate any feedback on the track:

http://willbenton.com/music/jaknaf.mp3

UPDATE: please check out the revised version.

thanks for listening!
wb

[two oh one]

This is a moody piece. Takes a while for the bass to pop in...

I like the melodic bass and discordant sounds. I love the way that it doesn't feel overly electronic, too. Film score stuff.

Um, maybe the chime could be brought up a little? Maybe some pad chord work to compliment the melodic bass? It could provide such a lift.

Neato.

[vonboyage]

This is a moody piece. Takes a while for the bass to pop in...

Yeah i thought that too..

Veeery moody.. i like this though, its different, some nice unexpected snare/perc hits going on there.. and the abstract melody/notes jus gives it that mysterious profile.

Not a massive fan of the midrange bass in this, as i think the tune sounded bless without it, speakers are shit so i cant tell if theres a sub, but if theres not.. there shud something there underneath the track, jus to drive it along.

Very good effort, will look forward to listening again when you've finished.


Von.

[FSTZ]

slow builder here

but that bass is nice (esp those decending notes)

the beat is good, however I think you'd get a bit more play with this one if you rearranged it so the intro isnt as long

cheers

[willb]

Thanks for the feedback, all. I'll make an update later today!

[willb]

Er, by "later today," I meant "next week." Here's an updated version. I'm still toying with the idea of adding some more chordal pad/stab type sounds, but I don't know if I want it any denser.