First tune up - comments & criticisms please!

[deej]

Been producing for a few months now and this is the most recent tune ive been working on. Im the only person thats heard it so far and i think it would be really helpful to get some honest opinions on whether to tweak it or trash it. Cheers

http://www.filefactory.com/file/af8dd1/

[coleco]

Sounds very Loefah when the bass comes in, dunno if you were going for that. Bass is solid, and the kick is nice. Drums are a bit quirky and interesting too. Not sure about the pitched down vocal. Also, I feel although I can see you were going for minimalistic bass, you could introduce a few more notes into the equation perhaps, also, the rythem is a bit too straight for my liking, try making use of shuffle etc to make it groove more?

Good stuff tho man, see if you can get round to my latest effort here: http://dubstepforum.com/viewtopic.php?t=32358

[psychonaught]

yer mann! this is nice. maybe a little bit too minimal but really nice vibe going on, sick wobbles. could be a bit heavier on the sub. definately worth tweaking very nice track!