sorry bout the big text I just really want feedback on this, I have a feeling people will like it
Any criticism is welcome
I like the raspyness of the vocals in the beginning...sounds kinda machine-like. Only about 30 seconds of vocal content, but then the "i love you" is all chopped up and repeating itself throughout the song starting at the drop on 0:30. I dig that funky beauty. Personally, i would play around with the ending...maybe make it end with a new sound, something random, maybe a uniquely chopped up version of the "i love you" that sounds different from what was repeated throughout the song. Something like that.
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Posted: Sun Feb 21, 2010 8:53 am
by thierry_le_dj
Soundcloud
i pretty much spent the whole weekend working on the main bass of this track (LFO,speed,cut off)
i also change the bass a few times was not sure but came back to the original and added an effect with lfo
see what you think.
am tired am off to bed now..
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Posted: Sun Feb 21, 2010 11:04 am
by Simbaa
thierry_le_dj wrote:Soundcloud
i pretty much spent the whole weekend working on the main bass of this track (LFO,speed,cut off)
i also change the bass a few times was not sure but came back to the original and added an effect with lfo
see what you think.
am tired am off to bed now..
THe intro melody is quite nice.
For the mid bass sound, it just sounds like an unfiltered distorted saw wave. At about 2.14 it sounds a little bit nicer, try expanding on that sound, maybe play an octave lower, and you could use some detune and maybe chorus to make it sound bigger.
Try lowering the mid bass in the mix too, around 6db or so. Layer a sine wave underneath if the sub drops too much.
I think the drums suffer from average samples, try replacing them/layering with different sounds to increase the punch
Let me know what you think I know the structuring is a little odd and the tune pretty forgettable but i think production wise its pretty solid
Thanks!
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Posted: Sun Feb 21, 2010 11:29 am
by Max4Beats
dedman wrote:
wirez wrote:
dedman wrote:cheers max, will certainly return the favour!
I Love You
0.33 - i like the drop but i feel like the bass could be a bit dirtier.. maybe try some chorus/bitcrushing combos and a saturator?
Not disrespect dedman's advice but I believe doing this would be slightly counteractive. You should address the issues from the source, eg your synth and really think about how you would like the lead to sound, listen to some similar tracks and compare the lead sounds. Nero makes stuff with a slightly similar idea, stuff like 'Blinded By The Lights Remix' is worth a listen for comparison.
You need to make sure your lead sound is dominating the majority of the frequency range, without getting in the way of everything else. This is not at all easy but the lead in this track is a big part of it.
Here's my full advice of how to make this track better -
1. Reprogram the synth to something more dominating.
2. Change your Hat samples to something more intense with plenty of attack transients, standard 909 hats will do as an example.
3. MIx your track so that the dominant parts are further forward, then mix everything else to suit them. For example, mix your Kick and Snare to -8dB then from there on mix from the bottom of the frequency spectrum upwards. In this particular track I would recommend mixing Kick and snare first, the sub bass, then lead bass, then anything else, then hats. The entire mix should end up peaking between -6 and -3dB. This should help you get a perspective of how the dynamics of the track should sound and you can then fine tune anything with EQ or effects.
The most important thing to do in this track is address your sounds from the source and make sure they're fat and warm before even processing and mixing them!
yeah definatly need adjusting in massive which i assume it is, but yeah to be honest with you the best points of reference for this one would be maccs wise words in the mastering thread and also look for the thread about resampling
New to all this, so i don't know if i'm doing it right....
Here's a kinda finished song: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FNoO5B20Df8
It's a remix of Dom, Lomp & Famous, Dutch Hip Hop...
Sounds good, but there are two things that i would do: 1) lower the vocals volume slightly and put more gain on the riddim & bass; 2) put a little more variation in the wobble...make it morph a bit more throughout the song. But nice remix for sure.
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Posted: Sun Feb 21, 2010 7:09 pm
by Worker Ant
New track, "Fornication Conscious." It's got a bit of randomness. Most of the percussions were self-recorded and produced starting from random sounds and glitches. Lemme know how it is.
Worker Ant wrote:New track, "Fornication Conscious." It's got a bit of randomness. Most of the percussions were self-recorded and produced starting from random sounds and glitches. Lemme know how it is.
Loving the experimental vibe this has, the drums sound sick. I'd make more of the whole vocal sample you have though ("and the night reeks of fornication and bad consciousness"), rather than just repeating the last two words. The original sample at that start is really dark and has a great effect, which i think is lost somewhat when you loop the last two words with heavy effects.
That's pretty much the only improvement i'd try and make though, great track
thierry_le_dj wrote:Soundcloud
i pretty much spent the whole weekend working on the main bass of this track (LFO,speed,cut off)
i also change the bass a few times was not sure but came back to the original and added an effect with lfo
see what you think.
am tired am off to bed now..
THe intro melody is quite nice.
For the mid bass sound, it just sounds like an unfiltered distorted saw wave. At about 2.14 it sounds a little bit nicer, try expanding on that sound, maybe play an octave lower, and you could use some detune and maybe chorus to make it sound bigger.
Try lowering the mid bass in the mix too, around 6db or so. Layer a sine wave underneath if the sub drops too much.
I think the drums suffer from average samples, try replacing them/layering with different sounds to increase the punch
thanks for the feed back!
will keep working on it...
First time posting in this topic, sorry for YouTube. But I think it's a little better than myspace.
Tell me what you think!
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Posted: Sun Feb 21, 2010 9:26 pm
by dddemain
continuumdnb wrote:
Would love feedback on either of these: Soundcloud Soundcloud
Uncertainty
I really like this, it's got a real chilled vibe to it. I like what you've done with the vocals and i'm a big fan of the housey drums. I'm not too sure about your choice of snare - maybe a softer, more 'real' sounding snare would suit the tune more. Also one of the vocal slices in the intro is a little harsh (@0.41 and other places) - possibly could do with being turned down a little or maybe some more reverb. Other than those small criticism's it's a very well put together track, which I can't fault at all.
Fidget
once again this is a nice chilly song, the sliced up vocals work really well here. the kicks are a tad weak though and the piano chords are pretty loud, don't know if I've just got sensitive ears or what but yeah, maybe they could do with coming down a little in the mix. Otherwise good work dude!
well this is my offering. I'm not really feeling it at the moment but yeah any feedback would be great... Soundcloud
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Posted: Sun Feb 21, 2010 9:33 pm
by wirez
TP
Re: PUT YOUR FINISHED TRACKS HERE FOR FEEDBACK.
Posted: Sun Feb 21, 2010 9:33 pm
by wirez
DP
Re: PUT YOUR FINISHED TRACKS HERE FOR FEEDBACK.
Posted: Sun Feb 21, 2010 9:33 pm
by wirez
Worker Ant wrote:New track, "Fornication Conscious." It's got a bit of randomness. Most of the percussions were self-recorded and produced starting from random sounds and glitches. Lemme know how it is.
Sounds a bit stripped of high frequency content bro, like everything has been passed through a low pass filter.. Need to bring out the treble either with a new instrument or by strategically moving up an octave on some instruments or carefully EQing
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Posted: Sun Feb 21, 2010 9:40 pm
by wirez
bartcore wrote:
First time posting in this topic, sorry for YouTube. But I think it's a little better than myspace.
Tell me what you think!
Sick tune man.
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Posted: Sun Feb 21, 2010 9:45 pm
by wirez
LTUK wrote:well this is my offering. I'm not really feeling it at the moment but yeah any feedback would be great... Soundcloud
With an intro so chilled and tension building (because of it's 'chilly/spooky' vintage kids toy sound and relaxed horror movie style sub ambience) you could really exploit some contrast from the drop. Heavy drums, a more fixed rhythm and maybe an attention grabbing 'scary' lead come to mind
The feeling of the track is wicked, I was really into it throughout the entire intro, but must admit I was very let down from the drop.
I know the structuring is a little odd and the tune pretty forgettable but i think production wise its pretty solid
