Ayoba Remix competition

[Izeales]

Sup ladies n gentlemen. Im a new comer at these forums so be nice XD

I use fruity loops for everything i make and im not very knowledgeable about music at all, i just know how to put strings of sound together to sound like music XD
basically i started a remix for a competition 2 days ago and this is what i have *so far*

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pwxwlRjVFlU

i aimed to make a hyperdub/dubstep remix that didnt have overly metallic sounding basslines and was simple and enjoyable. I need some feedback and constructive criticism and i need it quick cos the deadlines on the 12th :/ (i found the competition late >.<)

ps i know when the guy starts rapping it seems off beat but the shit head corrects himself XD.. and this is the original http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RuZdWHRk5-M and the download for the mix
http://www.sendspace.com/file/71f4le and upload here http://soundcloud.com/manrecordings/dropbox/profile, best be quick tho, deadlines on the 12th like i said

peace.

[Izeales]

i like the feedback on these forums

[Izeales]

I WOULDN'T MIND SOME FEEDBACK THANK YOU.

[B_90]

Drop the attitude mate, you havn't given one other forum member feedback! I'd also reccomend putting the tune on a host site that allows you to play it before downloading. Will get you more plays etc..

Tunes good, Needs A solid sub bass line on it though!

[Izeales]

yeah sorry bout the attitude mate :/ i been bit busy and the deadlines tonight... i will make some time to listen to other peoples work after the deadline x

ps i got it on youtube now to make it easy