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[Feedback] 2nd Tune

Posted: Wed May 11, 2011 1:47 am
by ToKaHoNtAs
Hey this is my second full length tune. The mix down isnt very good and i dont have a program to master this with, so keep that in mind. would love some feedback though. thanks, toka

http://www.soundcloud.com/tokahontas/the-oracle

Re: 16 Year Old Producer| Need Feedback!

Posted: Wed May 11, 2011 1:48 am
by Wagsi
Did you really have to let the world know you are 16?

Re: 16 Year Old Producer| Need Feedback!

Posted: Wed May 11, 2011 3:11 am
by davwuh
very nice for a young producer, much better than what I was makin at that age

Re: 16 Year Old Producer| Need Feedback!

Posted: Wed May 11, 2011 3:12 am
by DJNARKUS
big deal im 14 .but anyway that melody in with the bass doesnt really fit

Re: 16 Year Old Producer| Need Feedback!

Posted: Wed May 11, 2011 3:43 am
by ephyks
The track itself is good, but lacks a lot of vibe. Needs more bass and more soundscapes in the background to fill up the middle of your wobbles. Other than that, shit is hot man, keep it up.

Re: 16 Year Old Producer| Need Feedback!

Posted: Sun May 15, 2011 11:50 pm
by ToKaHoNtAs
hahaha jeeze im just trynna get some help from the older/more experienced guys. didnt intend to proclaim my age in a braggy sort of way. sorry. yeah i know it does sound kind of pieced together. i made different sections of it over a long period of time. thanks for the feedback though. wait, ephylks: do you mean more sub bass or actually more wobble sounds? i do agree i need some more chords in the pad progression.

Re: 16 Year Old Producer| Need Feedback!

Posted: Mon May 16, 2011 12:11 am
by jaimelee
Don't worry about your age, I was making stupid sounds on FL when I was that age. :)

The chord progression initially is a bit blocky, could do with some melding together.Drums are fairly good, hats might be a bit high in the EQ.
( Might just be me ). You want to bring those mid-range synths right out to boost the dynamic feeling they bring.

For your second tune ever it's very good, wasn't this capable then. Good work mate!

Re: 16 Year Old Producer| Need Feedback!

Posted: Mon May 16, 2011 1:24 am
by ephyks
ToKaHoNtAs wrote:hahaha jeeze im just trynna get some help from the older/more experienced guys. didnt intend to proclaim my age in a braggy sort of way. sorry. yeah i know it does sound kind of pieced together. i made different sections of it over a long period of time. thanks for the feedback though. wait, ephylks: do you mean more sub bass or actually more wobble sounds? i do agree i need some more chords in the pad progression.
Ah, don't worry about it man. I'm only 17. Just turned too. But more relevant, I was talking about the wobble bass. Give the track some OOMPH. Make it hit like a motherfucker and let the bitches go down to it. The music technique I use is to imagine a bunch of people waiting for you to drop a sick track. You gotta make it kickin'. Make those people get down and drop to the bass. Also, it doesn't have to be aggressive and all attack-y either, just groovy. When you compose dubstep make a sick beat. Drop that two step beat and throw some variation and flows in there like some fx and a swaying snare. The drop a slow steady bass over it and let it wobble. I'll make a tutorial on what I mean because I might be explaining this very vaguely, that is once I get my computer back from its failed hard drive.

EDIT - After listening to your song again, a pro-tip would be to slow down the wobble speed. It's way to fast for the beat.

Re: 16 Year Old Producer| Need Feedback!

Posted: Mon May 16, 2011 2:11 am
by Dosva
I'd have to agree with ephyks when it comes to the wobble speed. It is just too fast.

The tune itself isn't bad for being your second. Keep at it.

Re: 16 Year Old Producer| Need Feedback!

Posted: Mon May 16, 2011 2:38 am
by mindsetAUS
needs fatter kicks and snares, layer them

second drop is pretty cool

Re: 16 Year Old Producer| Need Feedback!

Posted: Mon May 16, 2011 10:55 am
by Ayatollah
DJNARKUS wrote:big deal im 14 .but anyway that melody in with the bass doesnt really fit
pfff get out grampa im 12

Re: 16 Year Old Producer| Need Feedback!

Posted: Mon May 16, 2011 6:42 pm
by DJNARKUS
:lol:

Re: 16 Year Old Producer| Need Feedback!

Posted: Mon May 16, 2011 6:51 pm
by Pistonsbeneath
best not to mention your age mate, a list is 16 and hes a badman gettin releases so age means nothing

Re: 16 Year Old Producer| Need Feedback!

Posted: Mon May 16, 2011 9:51 pm
by Spenca
really bad. i didnt like it, sorry. but when i started out, i was horrible. its just how things work you know?

Re: [Feedback] 2nd Tune

Posted: Mon May 16, 2011 11:00 pm
by ToKaHoNtAs
pistonsbeneath: yeah im realizing that it was a bad choice for the thread name. i just wanted stress that i am new at this. there, i changed the name of the thread. spenca: thanks for the opinion, but instead of just saying its bad can you offer some advice or an explanation of why you think it sucks? thanks.

Re: 16 Year Old Producer| Need Feedback!

Posted: Mon May 16, 2011 11:10 pm
by ToKaHoNtAs
ephyks wrote: Ah, don't worry about it man. I'm only 17. Just turned too. But more relevant, I was talking about the wobble bass. Give the track some OOMPH. Make it hit like a motherfucker and let the bitches go down to it. The music technique I use is to imagine a bunch of people waiting for you to drop a sick track. You gotta make it kickin'. Make those people get down and drop to the bass. Also, it doesn't have to be aggressive and all attack-y either, just groovy. When you compose dubstep make a sick beat. Drop that two step beat and throw some variation and flows in there like some fx and a swaying snare. The drop a slow steady bass over it and let it wobble. I'll make a tutorial on what I mean because I might be explaining this very vaguely, that is once I get my computer back from its failed hard drive.

EDIT - After listening to your song again, a pro-tip would be to slow down the wobble speed. It's way to fast for the beat.
great tips man thank you! please make this tut. that would be awesome. and ya i do agree the wob should be slower.