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UPDATED: First big project, feedback greatly appreciated.

Posted: Wed Jun 15, 2011 10:36 pm
by papirfly
Hi everyone, been lurking for a while. Been working on this track for a couple of days now, finally feeling comfortable with ableton.
Hugs and kisses to everyone who gives me feedback, I'm here to learn so I would appreciate it if you're 100% honest. :)

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EDIT 21/06:
Uploaded a new version of the track:
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Re: First big project, feedback greatly appreciated. (Dubste

Posted: Wed Jun 15, 2011 11:21 pm
by JernalismUK
Nice intro - the synths sound cool and I like the how the melody builds up. Love that rush with the pan delayed percussion right before the drop. Thought the high pitched synth was a nice aid to the bassline. I think you should try adding more variation to the bass sound. Try and make it more prominent and more 'full' and less 'synthy' if that makes sense? Need to tighten up the mixing on those drums too, the snare sounds quite drowned out in some places in the main section. Aside from that there are some cool ideas and I like the slower tempo. Is that 125bpm?

Re: First big project, feedback greatly appreciated. (Dubste

Posted: Wed Jun 15, 2011 11:32 pm
by SignalRecon
Very well done for your first track, definitely stoked that you are on Ableton, its awesome. you got suite?

Re: First big project, feedback greatly appreciated. (Dubste

Posted: Wed Jun 15, 2011 11:37 pm
by papirfly
Thanks alot, yeah it's 125bpm. I definitely understand what you mean by the wobble sounding like a synth, having a hard time making a rich bass without it drowning out all other sounds.

And yes, I'm on Live suite, thanks alot for the kind words. :)

Re: First big project, feedback greatly appreciated. (Dubste

Posted: Thu Jun 16, 2011 1:00 am
by Nealge
This is really pretty actually. You can try adding some distortion and overdrive to your bass. Not to make it obviously distorted, but multiple instances of a very light distortion with let your bass keep the same sort of sound but bring it further up in the mix without causing your output to clip.

Re: First big project, feedback greatly appreciated. (Dubste

Posted: Thu Jun 16, 2011 2:48 am
by SignalRecon
papirfly wrote:Thanks alot, yeah it's 125bpm. I definitely understand what you mean by the wobble sounding like a synth, having a hard time making a rich bass without it drowning out all other sounds.

And yes, I'm on Live suite, thanks alot for the kind words. :)
PM Me if you want me to send you a link for a really good videontutorial tht would help you out!

Re: UPDATED: First big project, feedback greatly appreciated

Posted: Mon Jun 20, 2011 11:54 pm
by papirfly
I've uploaded a new and improved version of the track, pretty much reworked the entire song and added a bunch of stuff based on feedback I've been getting.

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Again, hugs and kisses to everyone who listens. Thanks. :)

Re: UPDATED: First big project, feedback greatly appreciated

Posted: Tue Jun 21, 2011 4:41 am
by SignalRecon
Much better bro! Do you have Ozone on your master bus? Put it on Drum n Bass/Breaks preset with de-mud+EQ and this will be a solid sounding demo!