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Posted: Mon Jan 28, 2013 6:58 pm
by O Captain
Hey forum,

Just posted a new song on Soundcloud and I would love to get some feedback on it. In return I will give you feedback on one of your tracks.

Soundcloud

Thanks!

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Posted: Tue Jan 29, 2013 2:40 pm
by Tordal
hey man!

nice rhythms and a big sub in the intro.
dont like the synths afterwards tho, sound a little bit too "trancey" for my liking
i like pitched down snare more than the other one, tho a little more reverb could do.

best part from 3:00 to 3:30, that bass is dope, as well as the intro, the last part is way too trancey for me.

cheers

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Posted: Tue Jan 29, 2013 5:38 pm
by O Captain
Thanks for the feedback Tordal! I really appreciate the listen and great advice. I'm always wary to put effects on drums but I think a subtle blended reverb on the snare is a great suggestion.

For "Get It Up" in your sig here is my feedback:
- Good flow throughout the track
- I would like some lower sub bass to make that kick really thump
- The piano in the break at the end is really great, love that ambiance

Keep up the good work and once again thanks for the feedback!
-David

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Posted: Tue Jan 29, 2013 7:29 pm
by Suspense
I wasn't a fan of the intro at all. But around a minute it picks up quite nicely. I like the break at 2:00.. I like the changes in the track. Just not liking the intro

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Posted: Tue Jan 29, 2013 10:05 pm
by O Captain
@Suspense: Thanks for the feedback. I've been mulling over the intro. For a while I was thinking about splitting it into two tracks. Thanks for your honesty!

Feedback on your "I Need You" remix:
- Cool samples, I'm not familiar with the original but I liked to the vocal chopping
- Drop could use just a little more sub bass to drive the mix a little bit harder
- Tasty snare at the 4:30 mark... where did you get that sample? I want it haha

Thanks again for your honest feedback
-David

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Posted: Tue Jan 29, 2013 10:31 pm
by Tyrant City
I dug the track a lot, however a couple things really stuck out

I loved the beginning but it had an entirely different character than the majority of the piece and almost sounds like a piece of another track?
Aside from that I thought the sounds were clean and i loved the drums at the first big drop for that trappy hip hop feel

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Posted: Wed Jan 30, 2013 1:40 am
by O Captain
@Tyrant City - Thanks for the feedback. I've been contemplating the intro, and I know @Suspense also mentioned that the intro was not to his liking.

Thanks for the 2 cents, I appreciate you taking time to listen and comment on my track! Let me know when you come out with a track you want feedback on.
-David

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Posted: Wed Jan 30, 2013 1:55 am
by Suspense
The snare is a normal Vengeance Snare... It's just EQ'd with some delayed reverb

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Posted: Wed Jan 30, 2013 8:15 am
by Taosist
Oh man, so good tune, but I think, that drums, especially snare, should be softly. You should change it. Yup!
And tune reminds me music from "Sonic the Hedgehog 2" itself. I like it so much.

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Posted: Wed Jan 30, 2013 10:52 am
by wub
Trancey vibes aren't to my liking, but production is nice and crisp, nothing getting lost.

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Posted: Thu Jan 31, 2013 1:18 am
by O Captain
@Taosist - Thanks for the kind words! My friends always tell me that I should make video game music so maybe that's worth checking out :) Thanks for the feedback and tip about changing up the song.

My feedback for "Under Tension" by you:
- Heavy drop, kicked me in the chest!
- I'd like to hear a little more variation in the chord sound you've got going at 3:13

Keep up the great work, that song hits hard!

@wub - First off thanks for doing such a great job with the forum, we all appreciate it very much. Also thanks for taking time to also listen to my song and give it some feedback!

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Posted: Thu Jan 31, 2013 7:23 am
by Taosist
Thanx, man. You too, you too. Your music for me - something new. Keep up with it.